Re: Critique-- Group 1
Walker Lamond (twl2a@uva.pcmail.virginia.edu)
Wed, 24 Apr 96 17:19:04 EDT
group 1,
I hope the head actually becomes the first page.
The client pull is appropriate for the topic, but since we're talking about
conduct in general, I was expecting more than just grammar rules. What about
dining, etc.
The dance lesson is the most enjoyable part of any project I have seen.
Simple, wonderful. I know you are thinking of integrating quotes, but don't
change it too much.
The idea to include Nietche is wise, I guess it gives the project some
academic justification/foundation, but I would rather see the quotes
dispersed around the entire project--in the client pull string too. I don't
want to have to read too much Nietche without some graphic/comic/dancing
relief.
The string of original texts is good, but could you give them a subtle
background--not white. Maybe this is where you could add some original
commentary, your opinions on conduct, etc.
I don't like to have the theoretical explanation easily accessible--that goes
for all yous out there--just because It's cool to see if the project can
explain itself. A theory page at the end, for closure, works for me, but
this is obviously opinion only.
sweating in anticipation for the finished project,
Walker